All my life I have been an optimistic person. Every time the song, “Don’t Worry, Be Happy,” by Bob Marley, comes on the radio, it reminds me of myself. This song describes my personality. In my life I have had some troubles just as everyone does whether it be as small as a passing a chemistry quiz or as big as being in an interracial relationship when my parents are completely against it. But if I worry it will just make these troubles worse. All my life, I have tried to stay optimistic. I feel that if I look at the positive side of things, every thing in my life will be better.
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Once I arrived at school I met a boy who happened to be an African American. I met him in my biology class. We started talking on the phone and spending time together outside of class. The relationship progressed and we began to become a serious and exclusive couple. He is now my boyfriend. My boyfriend is a huge Akon fan. One day when he played one of Akon’s new songs, “Don’t Matter”; I thought it described our relationship perfectly. Because we are in an interracial relationship, we face several obstacles. American society looks down upon interracial couples. As we walk around campus together people may stare or people may make derogatory comments to us, but we do not care because we are the relationship together. We will fight to get past the negative things that come along with being in an interracial couple. Being in this relationship is not easy, but I have learned to ignore the negative part of the relationship and focus on the positive parts of the relationship. Akon’s song, “Don’t Matter,” reminds me why I am in this relationship. This song keeps me focused on the good rather than the bad.
College is a test to find out who your true friends are. Once I got to
When my father was singing “American Soldier,” by Toby Keith, it reminded of September 11, 2001. I remember everything about that day. It is a moment in history that will never be forgotten. I was in 8th grade in Mrs. Tolley’s chorus class. I found out that something had happened right before I left that class to go to my algebra class. As I walked into algebra class the news was on the television. We had a half day of school that day because of parent teacher conferences. I went home with my best friend and her mom was supposed to take us to the mall. Her mom told us that we could not go to the mall anymore because of what had happened. After this tragic event occurred, the country was filled with American Flags. Everyone was proud to be an American, especially me. I had friends go to war over this event. I wear a “Support our Troops” bracelet everyday to remind me of the soldiers that are fighting for my country. This song came out after this horrible catastrophe occurred. The song “American Soldier” reminds me of the horrific day of September 11, 2001- a day that I will never forget.
3 comments:
I noticed that there were some typos in your narrative. Also, some of the sentences included extra words that I don't think were intended to be included. Each narrative for each song was great on a microscopic level, but all of the narratives collaboratively did not relate a continuous story.
In the first paragraph: The fourth sentence is rather long. Maybe organize your thoughts better. Also, I don't think that beginning a sentence with the word, "but" is allowed. Good pathos and ethos.
The second paragraph is a little repetitive.
In the third paragraph, the sentence that begins, " one day...", the word when should be ommitted. You did a good job portraying the rational but also sensitive side of yourself.
In the end of the fourth paragraph, you should add the word "although", before the sentence, " my very best friend...".
Samantha-
This is a really powerful essay and I really appreciate that you're sharing it. Your songs fit really nicely with the mini-stories that you've told. My suggestion would be to find a thread between all of these stories and use that as a theme. Create an intro, conclusion and transitions between the stories. Very nice writing here.
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